Extra Credit

Revised
(Poking the smoldering coals with his stick and rearranging them carefully,) he kept the fire growing far into the night as he sat and blew and blew on the hollow branch, (the coals dancing and flames growing because of it.) He found that placing his fingertips, (dirty from his day of labor,) over the five holes would lower or raise the pitch. Moreover, (it strangely eased the pain in his heart) when he coaxed the voice from the branch. So, of course, he blew and made the branch sing until once again he dropped over from exhaustion. (The fire then burned the hollow branch into ash.)

Original
He kept the fire growing far into the night as he sat and blew and blew on the hollow branch. He found that placing his fingertips over the five holes would lower or raise the pitch. Moreover, when he coaxed the voice from the branch, it strangely the pain in his heart. So, of course, he blew and made the branch sing until once again he dropped over from exhaustion. The hollow branch was then burned to ash by the fire.

I know my shift out of order and action verbs may not be the best but I think that it was the best I could do under the circumstances.